Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

Dear Amy, I am incredibly sorry for not being in touch recently. My life has been a bit hectic. I am writing
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letter to welcome you to my country and give you some suggestions. Melbourne is a huge city with a deep cultural background. A variety of activities are
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here, so after settling down, you can spend your leisure time attending these events.
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, as an international city, Melbourne has a huge number of people who are from different countries, which makes
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convenient to appreciate different types of famous and traditional dishes. I reckon that it is extremely easy for you to find a rewarding and well-paid job as you have a decent qualification. First
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, several accounting firms are hiring senior staff, so you can try to apply now.
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, if you would like to find a job in the finance sector, it would be a bit difficult as Melbourne does not have a lot of
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. I think making new local friends is helpful to
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get used to the local life, so you can try to make friends online.
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join several volunteering
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after you come, which is a perfect opportunity to meet nice people. If you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. I am looking forward to meeting you in person soon. Best wishes, Lily

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Task response
Plan your letter. Put one idea in each paragraph: city, work, friends.
Coherence and cohesion
Some phrases are not clear. Use simple and clear words.
tone
Warm start and close.
content
You mention the city, jobs and friends ideas.
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