In the modern era, technology has become an essential part of everyday life. However, while it is often argued that technology such as the Internet and cellphone has beneficial effects on our relationship, it also has a number of drawbacks in human interaction. This essay will analyze the positive aspects and drawbacks of this issue.

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these days
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as one of the most important things in our life. and the way
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how
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communicate has changed. So, some
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think that
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has a lot of benefits, while others believe that
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has a bad effect on
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relationships.
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essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, we have
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who think that we should not use phones or laptops to contact.
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, when you want to meet a friend usually you go to a cafe but now a video call is enough. It is not good for our mental health. So, that's why
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way of living is not something that our families are used to and they were not raised to
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with it. ,
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children are spending most of the day playing
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of online games; it has a side effect on their body
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,
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who support the idea that
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is useful are more than those who do not. It is clear from what we can see that
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are allowed to do anything on the internet.
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as, studying, selling, and working.
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to reach
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who live in remote places. For an
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I have a friend who
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in New York yet
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can talk to her every day because of the
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in conclusion, after a careful analysis of both
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I believe that
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one of the greatest things that human beings have made is the internet and the mobile phone.
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