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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, around the world there are a plethora of
museums
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 and art
galleries
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 that are available for
people
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. These
centres
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 are built by the government to protect the valuables of a country and exhibit the talents of
people
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.
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, to enter the buildings a certain amount is charged to
people
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 while there are
museums
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 and
galleries
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 which have free entry.
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, the advantages of charging a
fee
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 outweigh the negatives and the following essay will elaborate
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 with examples. Commencing,
museums
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 and exhibition rooms are full of knowledge where one can extend the skills and facts about certain historical factors. Apart from that, there are other advantages of charging a
fee
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 while entering these constructions because if not charged the governments are unable to renovate, pay utility bills and provide wages to the cleaners as well as provide security and safety to the
people
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 who
visit
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.
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, another plus point of charging is that authorities can invest money to build more
galleries
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 and able to generate revenues to keep the place clean and attractive which can
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 be a tourist destination. As an example, from my personal experience, there are
museums
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 I have visited which I paid entry free and the luxurious facilities they have is breathtaking compared to
museums
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 that are free.
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, charging an amount from the
people
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 who
visit
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 brings great positive benefits to the authorities for the future development of art
centres
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 and
museums
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. Despite the advantages, there are some disadvantages of charging a
fee
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 because
people
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 hesitate to
visit
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 these
centres
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 if they have to
visit
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 by paying a huge price.
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, individuals are unable to gain knowledge and information regarding essential historical factors whenever they need. As an example, if a student is conducting historical research he or she needs to
visit
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 the
museums
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 quite often, and visiting numerous times will charge that student a huge amount. To conclude,
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 there are a few drawbacks to charging an admission
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 to visitors the positives are greater which
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 that the money the
centres
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 earn benefits the
galleries
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 and
museums
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 in the future.

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