Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Numerous
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are of the belief that every person is in charge of their health in terms of what should they eat or avoid.
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other
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are inclined to conceive that administration has the main role to protect their sound
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subject. Plenty of the population has
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notion that the government should be the guardian of their health and provide the best situations to fulfil
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demand since all the supplies
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as
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,fruits and other stuff have been produced by the government.
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, If they do not have sufficient observation
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will get various aliments from expired and corrupted materials,
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recently a group of communities in a rural district have venomed by the polluted water.the main faulters were the administrations of that village.
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, some group folks argue that any person who is responsible for their own sound
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. they claimed that in entire our life we have made a decision about what to eat or not thanks largely to
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fact they have stood firmly against the other opinion.
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numerous
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including adolescents have not willing to exercise and most times junky
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have been eaten by them.
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as children parents should be managed their diet and
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and instruct them
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they can watch out them selfs. In conclusion,some
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including me are of the belief that the lawmakers should be the organization which takes care of
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in terms of qualification of
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and any stuff that
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have been consuming
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because
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has been defined everything that we eat. even though some other
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conceive that the government have had the main role
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distributing or producing
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so they have to be in charge of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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