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Band 5.5

Some people thinks that governments should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree.

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There have been arguments about unhealthy
food
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. Some
people
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 think the government should change the whole pricing policy by increasing taxes on unhealthy
food
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 in order to motivate
people
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 to start eating healthy and
diet
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food
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instead
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, in fact, I completely agree with
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 of all, we should all be aware
about
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 our
food
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 choices, whatever you are planning to eat will have
major
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 impact on your body system and health so
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 why it is important to pick the
food
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 that
contain
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 vitamins, protein and calcium,
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 as fruits and dairy. Constantly eating
junk
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food
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 and sodas will lead to chronic diseases like Diabetes and Cholesterol disease. The government increasing
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junk
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food
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 prices seems to be the ideal way to solve
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people
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 are not considering quitting
junk
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food
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.
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, what makes it harder for
people
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 to remain with their
diet
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 plan is that healthy
food
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 costs much more than
junk
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food
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 and they have easy access to it,
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,
diet
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food
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 is extremely expensive. If the government starts to change their pricing system by increasing
junk
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food
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 costs or reducing
diet
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 and healthy
food
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 prices it will hopefully encourage
people
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 to take care of their health by picking the right
food
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 choices.
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, in conclusion, we are all responsible for our health and we should be mature by trying as hard as we can in order to take care of it.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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