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People should be allowed to obscure their identity online. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #identity
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While some
people
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 think anonymity is the best way to experience the
internet
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 safely others think that everyone should assume every word they write by showing their
identity
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. As well as I am concerned I think that avoiding being anonymous is crucial in a purpose to eliminate bullying and bad behaviour online. If
people
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 want to comment on something they have to be recognizable.
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, some
internet
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 users enjoy anonymity for writing bad comments about other
people
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, it is cowardly behaviour because the person who is intimidated can not defend himself considering that they are no evidence of who is the offender. Sometimes
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 kind of harassment can bring the victim to commit a dramatic action like suicide which is why the bullies have to know and are arrested. The platform Twitter is a really good example of
people
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 using pseudo for writing bad comments without caring about the effect of their behaviour. One other argument against hiding one's
identity
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 online is that it is impossible to enjoy a hundred promotions that the
internet
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 can provide. Undeniably
internet
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 can learn a lot from its user, due to its very smart artificial intelligence,
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 users can easily find promotions on goods or reduce their research time. Being anonymous shunts these programs and can be inconvenient for
people
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. When a person buys a plane ticket without hiding his
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, the
internet
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 directly proposes the least expensive hotel nearby. In conclusion, deleting one's
identity
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 online is very dangerous, it can bring about the absence of justice for bullies and catastrophic issues for victims of these bullies.
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 by not being anonymous on the
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people
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 can enjoy amazing sales.
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