Humans tend to copy one another, especially in fashion, choice of clothes , and consumer goods. Yo what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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dress and purchase the same products
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one another in
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society
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. Personally, I don't believe
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, everyone feels secure and accepted when behave the same way in
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when celebrities like Selena Gomes post on
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Instagram
about what kind of makeup they put on, almost everyone would be encouraged to buy the same makeup because they want to be like Selena and be liked by the community.
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is because if a person doesn't follow the day-to-day fashion styles and other trendsetters, they are deemed to be labelled as 'outdated' and
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more likely to be judged and ignored by his peers and colleagues.
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, humans are quite competitive in nature.
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some
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with high pay or generational wealth will have luxurious taste ,
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to buy expensive goods from
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brands like Gucci, Chanel and Prada.
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is because possession of
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goods will give them a sense of high status.
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others may simply settle down for something that fulfills their basic requirements.
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there are some
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who like to be perceived as 'unique'.
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they may not follow social norms but believe in themselves and create an entire look for them ,despite whatever
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thinks about them.
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for these reasons, I do not entirely agree that
people
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copy one another in everything because it really depends on one's likes and dislikes and how they want to be seen by
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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