Do you think that ageing society will disapear? what are the advantages and disadvantages of having more old people in society?

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Nowadays according to the advancements in medicine and the improvement of the quality of our lives more and more
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can still live for a long time.
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, governments should face ageing communities these days. In
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I will discuss the cons and pros of long life and
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explore my idea about it. In my point of view, in near
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we will observe increasing in the population of elderly
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but we can still get benefits from
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issue.
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, many
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who are retired can spend more time with their grandchildren and these family boundaries will play an important role in our young generation's lives.
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, many big firms can ask healthy old-aged-pensions to back work and share their experiences with young labourers and fresh workforces. Due to the above statement, I believe that old
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bring lots of advantages to our societies.
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there are some good points in having an old generation, industrial companies should tackle
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a shortage of young employees.
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, the governments are worried about the financial support that they have to provide for retired
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..
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, the countries should allocate more budgets to these places.
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, young generations should work hard to pay more taxes to the governments which should support pensioners. To sum up, we all know about the varied vital roles old
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have in our lives. As far as I am concerned, the advantages of having senior citizens outweigh the disadvantages and the regulators should take immediate action to find
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solutions to support
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in their retirement time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic shift
  • Life expectancy
  • Elderly care
  • Intergenerational
  • Gerontology
  • Retirement planning
  • Social security
  • Aging population
  • Economic sustainability
  • Healthcare provision
  • Workforce participation
  • Silver economy
  • Ageism
  • Longevity
  • Assistive devices
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