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Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

#cultures #world #trend
People
 now have the access to learn about different
cultures
through
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 various ways. Which makes the
world
 now becoming more similar. In
this
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 I will discuss the reason why we are now finding more similarities between
cultures
then
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and then
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 explain why I believe
this
 is a positive impact
for
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 society.
To begin
 with, the reason why
people
 around the
world
 are becoming more similar is because of
advancement
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 in technology.
This
 allows
people
 to connect with each other from different parts of the
world
 using technology.
For example
, we can now still be in touch with our friends that live in another country through social media and mobile phones.
In addition
, due to
globalization
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 the
world
 has become more diversified.
This
 allows
people
 to exchange
culture
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cultures
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 and share experiences without having to visit the place physically. I do,
however
, believe that
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the
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cultures
 around the
world
 becoming more similar will create a healthier environment, because one can find
their
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 sense of belonging.
This
 helps
people
 to become more
open minded
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 and it reduces racial discrimination which will
then
 allow
people
 to have equal opportunities.
For example
, in a city like Melbourne, there
are
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 a broad range of different ethnic groups in the city.
Therefore
, it makes it very easy for international visa holders to find
a
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decent
job
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 and support themselves during their time in Australia. To sum up, I believe the reason why different parts of the
world
 are becoming more similar is due to the improvement in technology that allows
people
 to learn about different
cultures
 in different ways. Personally, I do think
this
 is a positive impact
for
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 society because
this
 allows
people
 to become more
open minded
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 and find their sense of belonging.
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