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Very simple systems for controlling machines are invented about the same time. Real
robots
 that could be programmed perform difficult tasks were not practical until computers became available to control them in the 1960s. Since
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 they have become part
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 our everyday lives. Most
robots
 work in factories, assembling cars and electronic equipment. While a few
robots
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 dangerous
jobssuch
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jobs such
 as exploring space, domestic
robots
 can dean our floors and
cutting
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 the grass
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 and medical
robots
 can even
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 in hospitals. The latest
robots
 even look a little bit human
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 copy human movements
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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