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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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Today, in
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 modern world,
internet
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the internet
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 along with
latest
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the latest
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 technological equipment
are
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widely used to have easy
access
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 to
songs
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 and
books
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 because the world has become a global village because of
advancement
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advancements
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 in
technological
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the technological
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 arena. Not only having reach to free
music
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 and
books
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,
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but,
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it has
also
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 given
an
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easy
access
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to
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people to get
copyright
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copyrighted
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music
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 and
books
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 without paying a penny. Despite having some rare positive effects, it is, to a large extent, a negative aspect of
the
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modern technology. On
one
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 side,
one
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 can view it as a positive development because of having free-of-charge
access
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 to
books
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 and
music
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, especially as
books
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 are said to be the source of spreading knowledge and awareness while
music
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 pleases the sad soul. If
one
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 has a book or song from the internet into
one
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's computer without any payment,
one
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 may argue that s/he wants to receive education through
books
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 or wants to
listen
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songs
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 to change his/her sad mood;
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, there is no harm in it by downloading the material from the web browsers free of cost.
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, contrary to
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 attitude, it may lead towards the creation of many negative elements in
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society. It is
well-known
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a well-known
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 phenomenon that writers and singers earn their livelihood through their writing and singing. As they need money to feed their belly, and if they are not properly paid, the quality of the
books
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 and
songs
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 may go down. Equally, it is
also
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 alarmingly possible
the
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 genius minds may stop choosing book-writing or song-singing as their profession, resulting
a
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lack of good
books
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 and
songs
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 in
the
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society.
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 why
,
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 it is necessary for the governments to make sure that the writers and singers are paid a handsome amount on every download so that they may continuously remain motivated towards their profession and produce quality material. In conclusion, technological advancement, no doubt, has provided easy
access
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 to things like
books
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 and
songs
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 which may seem a positive aspect of it.
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, unpaid downloading from
the
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websites is
highly
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a highly
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 negative step, equal to stealing
one
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's wealth.
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