A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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they are living in the material world. To add more points on

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, kindness, and

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while they are looking for a husband or a wife. Their focus only on their income and status they have.

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, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.

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place in society might not be given to them. In conclusion,

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the topic.

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, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.

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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Many people think that zoos are cruel. Others think they are helpful in protecting rare animals. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?