A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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they are living in the material world. To add more points on

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, kindness, and

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while they are looking for a husband or a wife. Their focus only on their income and status they have.

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, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.

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place in society might not be given to them. In conclusion,

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the topic.

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, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.

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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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