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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Enormous
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 number of things have changed in the world over the past five decades. Several
sort
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 of features has been effective
on
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 those changes
such
 as
materalizm
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materialism
,
eceonomical
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economic
economical
 growth, and overpopulation. Due to all of those reasons,
worth
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 of
people
 seems to be evaluated by their social status and annual revenues. I totally agree with the given statement and
this
 essay will examine the topic.  The way we see the world is not always
same
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 as before. To start with, due to
increase
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 in the number of
people
 the value of individuals is decreasing,
this
 is
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 matter fact of
mathemathic
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mathematics
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, because if something is more than needed, the value of it will reduce
inevatibly
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inevitably
inevitable
. To
demostrate
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demonstrate
,
people
 do not care
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about other's
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other's
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others'
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 feelings because
of
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they are living in the material world. To add more points on
this
 matter, human beings
no
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 longer interested in
such
charasterictic
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characteristic
 features like
honor
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honour
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, kindness, and
reilability
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reliability
 while they are looking for a husband or a wife. Their focus only on their income and status they have.
Eventhough
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Even though
, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.
Second
 of all, technological advances own a big proportion of why
people
 lost their values.
For example
, there is a new trend called
online-dating
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,
this
 is happening on social media platforms
for example
 Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and so on. Users show their abilities, their bodies,
the
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 book that they have read, and
other's
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others
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 will make
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an interpretation
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interpretation
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interpretations
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 about them without talking them even a word.
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,
the
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people
 assume that they have to be more active on social media accounts and
seem
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 look to
other's
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others
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,
otherwise
 they think
the
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 place in society might not be given to them. In conclusion,
those
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 reasons that I mentioned above are creating my thoughts about
this
 topic and why I strongly
agree
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 the topic.
Eventhough
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Even though
, it seems that there is nobody who cares about old-fashioned values but there are plenty of them.
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