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SOME PEOPLE FEEL THAT THERE SHOUD BE A FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR EACH TYPE OF CRIME. OTHERS FOT THAT THE CIRUMSTANCES OF AN OFFENCE SHOULD BE TAKEN IN TO ACCOUNT WHEN DECIDING ON A PUNISHMENT. DISCUSS BOTHE SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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It is irrefutable that crimes are burgeoning day by day in every country. An army of masses thinks that abuse should be fixed for all kinds of offences. While some people believe that circumstances should be analyzed behind crime till decide the abuse. I think that situations should be the
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 consideration before
punishment
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. I will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, there are multifarious reasons why some people said fixed torture should be given to all kinds of criminal activities. The
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 and foremost reason is that crimes would be reduced.
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, if all minor and major crimes have the same punishments
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 people are afraid to do a case in their life.
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, the constitution of the county would be strong. Due to
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, reason development of a nation can be seen and the nation would become safe.
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, looking towards the reasons and situations of the offender to give
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 is necessary
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, if a culprit does snatching
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, the authority should look at the situation of his house the criminal belongs to a poor family which is why he is attempting snatching activity. In
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 case, given capital or fixed
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 is not good
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. Ministry should give them a chance to criminals to realize their mistakes.
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, sometimes minor violations by children
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 as firing in a crowded place harm the public it does not mean the law will give fixed
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 to children because children are not enough mature at an early age they do not know about the outcomes of firing in a public place. To conclude, not only do positive results of fixed
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 but it has detrimental effects
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 on a criminal’s life.
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 why the union should not fix forfeiture for all kinds of violations.
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