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A glance at the graph show information regarding the usage of cyberspace by women of all
age
 groups ranging from 12
years
-65+
years
 in the USA for two
years
 between 2000 and 2001. In an overview, the majority of children spent their time on the web. whereas, elderly females spent the least.
Although
 there is a steady difference between all
age
 groups up to 55
years
, there was a moderate declining trend in the 55-65
years
 of
age
.
Firstly
, 80-90 per cent of youngsters (12-24 yrs), utilized hyperspace,
however
,
this
 trend continued to follow with a slight difference in the percentage of people. coming to people of 25-35 yrs of
age
 - about 78 per cent of ladies used the net. As the
age
 increased there was a decline in usage of internet among the females,
this
 can be reflected when we have a look at the 36-45
years
age
 group which demonstrates a decline of about approximately 10% (68%).
Furthermore
, there was a significant downfall in online users to almost 48%
in
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 women aged 55-65
years
.
Finally
, among the older
age
 group (65+) only 20 per cent are involved in web-based activities.
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