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Nowadays people get married and have children after the age of 30. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples based on your experiences

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There is no doubt that these days forming a family is a critical face in our life. Even though you formed a family early twenties or later after
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, family is important. In
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 development status and I will draw my own conclusion. In terms of
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 view, getting married after
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 of
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 has various advantages.
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, the couple will feel they are stable and their relationship is healthy. They will have a chance to know each other insights.
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, I strongly agree, that if they get married they will believe in the value of their marriage contract and do more respect for its meaning.
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, those who get married at any
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 will have the benefit of a comfortable and relaxing feeling, as they can be still happy because they are together. They avoid being alone or lonely which might cause more problems if they become older. I believe that the marriage
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 belongs to cultural habits.
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, In European
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do not have the same pressure from their society as Arabic countries have.
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, they feel free to choose their marriage date even though they
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have had
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, the main negative view
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 claim is that the people who get married later after
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,
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will have fewer chances to have a big family.
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 is because life development is accelerating and they will have many difficulties managing to have one or two children.
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, no
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 to avoid getting married after
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, but they might have many challenges that need to be concerned.
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 they face challenges in forming families after the
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 of
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, they will be well-educated people and more engaged in the community. In conclusion, I believe that it is positive action to get married; does not matter about the
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. Every stage of our life has its own experiences which we should learn how to cooperate and deal with it.
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