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information technologoly is making it increasingly easy to collect and access computerised data on individuals, which poses a threat to privacy. In what ways can this information gathered be misused and what can be done to minimise these misuses and protect the privacy of the individual?

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Introduction
These days we see that it has become very easy to procure confidential
data
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 over the internet which breaches the privacy of an individual.There are a wide variety of tactics to gather private information but artificial intelligence is becoming increasingly popular.
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, there are precautions which people can take
for minimizing
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this
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 current trend by using encrypted passcodes.
Body · 1
To commence with, how artificial intelligence is playing a role in our
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; It has been increasingly used to collect
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.
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,
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 collected
data
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 is used by certain scammers to gain profits.
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, if we make a purchase on online websites , our credit card details can be shared with them and they can use our credit information without our own knowledge.
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, it can
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 collect significant
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 from our search history or networking sites and may threaten us for their personal gains.
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, recent surveys have shown that youngsters are receiving blackmail calls saying that their morphed pictures will be exposed to the public and demand
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 money.
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There are ways which can be implemented by people to protect their
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 and information. In recent times, various encrypted algorithmic websites
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 available.
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 people should protect their social networking platforms with encrypted passwords.
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, updating the passwords regularly can curb the issue and
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 being aware of cybersecurity can reduce
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 problem. To illustrate, a person who has knowledge about the security protocol so not use nonsecure sites and is less likely to be cheated.
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 it is important to be very careful.
Conclusion
To summarize, software development has many drawbacks on equal feet with merits. So, one should be very cautious
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 operating certain non-secured platforms and updating the security very often can reduce the issue
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