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Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think the education will not work. Disscuss both views and give your opinion.

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Junk
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food
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 has detrimental effects on human
beings
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health
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 according to the experts.Some
people
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 need to be educated about the benefits of not taking
junk
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food
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,
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 feel no results can be accomplished, as compared to
education
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 about not having
junk
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food
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.
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perspective
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.In my opinion,
Education
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 is necessary for the community about limiting
junk
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food
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.
Education
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 about
food
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 plays an important role in
people
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's
health
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.
Health
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 can be built based on the
food
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, we intake.If anyone understands the impact of taking
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food
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, a person can control their diet
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.Today scenario's
people
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 are more conscious of their
health
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 and they want to understand the
nutrition
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 of
food
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.
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 awareness allows them to intake the right category of foods.
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, According to the survey,
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 Challanels have the highest
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,as
people
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 are interested to improve their
health
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 by increasing their
knowledge
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 and taking the right action on time for the improvement of their
health
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.
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, humans feel that, if they improve their
knowledge
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 of
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, they are able to feed their families with the right nutritious
food
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 and contribute to family progress.
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 there is high consumption of Ghee as compared to refined oil these days, since
people
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 grasp the
knowledge
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 of
food
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,whereas Refined oil is only a market gimmick to disorient the consumers. On the other side,
Education
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 does not matter, because humans want to be in a comfortable zone and they do not want to change.Change is difficult for every individual.Due to
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, the obese population is increasing especially in the United States.Like, As we have seen there are 60% of
people
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 in America are obese according to studies as they are not aware of the product's
nutrition
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 and consume based on its taste only.
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,
People
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 feel that taste is more important than the
nutrition
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 of any
food
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,so they do not want to take
knowledge
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.
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 allows the business to grow by focusing on taste only
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 of
nutrition
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 and keep on taking
junk
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food
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. In conclusion,
People
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 have diverse views on the
knowledge
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 of
junk
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food
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.In my opinion,
knowledge
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 is power and needs to be used for
health
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 benefits and to limit
junk
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food
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.
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