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Some people think that the urban spaces must be used for parks rather than for housing. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #spaces #parks
The figure beneath illustrates how
noodles
 are produced by factories.
This
 production includes 8 parts In summary,
first
, the flour is taken by trucks from the storage silos.
Second
, water and oil are added to the mixture followed by moving on rollers which leads to flour turning into dough sheets. The fourth part consists of turning dough sheets into strips by more rolling. After
noodles
 discs are produced they are cooked with some oil and
then
 dried.
In addition
, while
noodles
 are poured into cups vegetables and spices are added. The
last
 part is about labelling the cups
besides
 sealing them. Overall, needless to say, as it takes 8 parts to manufacture
noodles
 it is a hard job to do.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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