It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

There is a saying that life itself is a risk.
In every
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decision, choice or step
one
take
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in life,
it
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always
involve
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risk.
Therefore
, taking chances
have
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become part of our daily survival, in order to achieve our goal and become successful. I believe that the merits of
risks
surpass the demerits.
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essay will be discussing both views and my opinion. On
one
hand, taking
risks
can result
to
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physical injury, accidents, bankruptcy and loss of
one
's life. In terms of career choice, investing in goods and shares which is part of
risk
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the risk
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, can heed good profit but can
also
lead to severe loss in the company.
Furthermore
, individual
risks
involving
sport
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activities
such
as car racing, hockey, bicycle racing, high jump etc can cause
fracture
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fractures
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of the bones, amputation of
one
's limb and sometimes death but the rewarding part is what encourages people to partake in those activities despite the
risks
involved.
Recent
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study showed that 40-60% of
athletics
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involved in
high
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jump fractured
one
or both limbs before becoming perfect in the activity.
On the other hand
, taking chances on
professional
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a professional
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level
which
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may involve employing a good worker that
one
thinks
its
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suitable for a job that can increase the
company
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company's
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productivity. Specifically, the employee can bring new innovative ideas and ways to push the company forward. Meanwhile, on
personal
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level, taking
risks
can motivate people in achieving what they never thought of achieving, by making them move from their comfort zone and
pursuing
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their dreams.
For
instance
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a man,
leave
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his father's house in search of greener pastures for his future. In summary, there are many negative effects of taking chances but I believe that the positive impacts of it,make people want to explore more.
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  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
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  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
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