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The graphs
given
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show information regarding the
number
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of attendees the recreational venues had in 2009 and details of the admission
ticket
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price
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. Overall, having a closer look at the chart, it is quite evident that the cinema was more popular
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however
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, their
ticket
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price
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was exceptionally low in comparison to the others. While sports and theme parks, had comparatively low visitors, their tickets were quite highly-priced.
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, in 2009, cinemas had a surplus
number
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of viewers (more than 1000, in thousands) which was 3 times higher than the
number
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of theme park visitors. Sports had the least
number
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of audiences around 180 thousand which was approximately 2 times lower than theme park attendance. Turning to the admission
ticket
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price
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, there were two categories ; single
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ticket
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and family tickets which admitted 4 people.The football games had a
ticket
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price
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varying between 71- 75
USD
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. Other categories of sports had a lower
price
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of about 34
USD
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and 24
USD
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( basketball and cricket).
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, the cinema had the least admit
ticket
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price
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which was about 15
USD
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, which was quite
in contrast
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to the higher no of visitors .

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