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Housing and waste disposal are major issue in cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#waste #cities
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Recent advances in globalization and modernization have resulted in cities being occupied
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vast
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 majority of
population
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the population
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.
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 has resulted in various issues among which housing and the problem of
waste
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 disposal are the major ones. I totally agree with
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 statement and will present my reasoning in support of
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 in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, the construction of concrete buildings
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 taken place in a haphazard manner without considering the necessity of the natural environment.
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, it has aggravated
the
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air
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 pollution as there are no trees available to capture the harmful gases released and alter them.
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, it has been generally found in Nepal that the major cities
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 as Kathmandu, Biratnagar, Chitwan and so on are recorded with low
air
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 quality index in comparison to the villages.
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, mismanaged planning of the household colonies
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in
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air
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 pollution. In a similar manner, the management of
waste
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 either degradable or non-degradable is not an easy task either in
the
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huge city areas. On
daily
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 basis kitchen, farmyard, hospitals, and public places produce
tones
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 of unwanted output which make it complex for the metropolis in disposing
it
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of it
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to
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in
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 the right place.
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, landfills
also
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 get packed within a month and with the slow degradation
process
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 extra land areas are not available.
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, in Kathmandu city of Nepal daily vast amount of
waste
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 is generated but only a single disposing site named Sisdol is available which is common for
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 two metropolitan cities
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.
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,
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the lack of appropriate and adequate dumping
sites
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it
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causes major problems. In a nutshell, due to the upward trend of population densities,
the
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housing and
waste
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 production have occurred as main issues which result in low
air
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 quality and
lack
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 of
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ofdisposing
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disposing
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 sites.
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