Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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everyone

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different means of technology which is beneficial for various industries. It

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by many

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the reflection of the promotion by the company and not based on the needs of

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with

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essay, I will explain the reasons. To commence with, in the advertisement the manufacturers hide some facts. To explore it, products shown by the anchor mention the advantages for the

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the side-effects in small words.

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the cleaning chemical supply organisation for writing the disadvantages of liquid in not clearly visible font, which results in

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skin irritation.

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people

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the influence of brand

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, the reputation of the brand

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individuals to buy expensive stuff which is commercial presented by

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celebrities. To explicate, when the

youngester

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youngster

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follow their favourite star they ignore the cons or negative side of goods and blindly shop

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just

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show off to their friends.

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TV programme a famous personality

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the use of alcohol,

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divert

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the mind of folks to purchase and drink.

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the promotions of goods not only sometimes hide

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but

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youngsters

to shop

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things.

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