Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's
era
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everyone
use
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different means of technology which is beneficial for various industries. It
is consider
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by many
people
that the products we buy
is
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the reflection of the promotion by the company and not based on the needs of
public
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. I
am totally agree
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with
this
statement and in
this
essay, I will explain the reasons. To commence with, in the advertisement the manufacturers hide some facts. To explore it, products shown by the anchor mention the advantages for the
people
and take the benefits by
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the side-effects in small words.
For example
, the headlines of 'India Times' mention that a man
sue
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the cleaning chemical supply organisation for writing the disadvantages of liquid in not clearly visible font, which results in
the
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skin irritation.
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, it is proven that
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people
ignore the drawbacks
under
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the influence of brand
name
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.
In addition
to
this
, the reputation of the brand
encourge
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encourage
encourages
the
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individuals to buy expensive stuff which is commercial presented by
the
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celebrities. To explicate, when the
youngester
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youngster
youngest
follow their favourite star they ignore the cons or negative side of goods and blindly shop
them
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just
for
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to
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show off to their friends.
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, In
a
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experiment it is found that in
an
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TV programme a famous personality
encourge
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encourages
the use of alcohol,
it
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divert
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the mind of folks to purchase and drink.
As a result
, the visuals on screen by some big shots affect the mind of
people
. In conclusion, one can say that
,
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the promotions of goods not only sometimes hide
truth
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the truth
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but
also
influence
youngesters
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youngsters
to shop
expensive
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for expensive
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things.
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  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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