Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
emerging consumer needs

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced from all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. I would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men and possibly women.

Supermarkets shoul only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it.

Write a letter to your friend from a different country. Invite him/her to a party at your home and include the following: what the party is about give directions on how to get to your place suggest how to accommodate him/her Start with Dear

Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?