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Scientific innovation is always a positive thing and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your answer.

Innovation in terms of science has always had advantages
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 people should incorporate that. I personally do not agree and would not advocate
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 notion for several reasons. To deal
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, the misappropriation of innovative sciences is likely to destroy the delicate environment.
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, nowadays, people have easy access to
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 materials.
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 of using nets, fishermen tend to use bombs to catch the fish.
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, fishermen do not care whether the bombs are good or not.
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, the baby fish die and the ecosystem is destroyed. If fishermen continue
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 method, they might be in a situation where there are no more fish in the future.
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 situation would put them in difficulties in terms of earning money.
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, trapped them in poverty
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 the problem got worse and worse.
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, the existence of scientific innovation would make the community lazy.
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, the community in the past used their fingers or even sticks to do some tasks.
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, they had good critical thinking and problem-solving. They calculate the tasks manually, but now we
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have computers and we probably can do all tasks faster than manually.
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, they lose their capability and become lazy. If we had not used our brains in calculating, it would be getting worse.
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, as the relevant reasons above show
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 disadvantages
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 we consider it to not encourage scientific innovation in society’s life since the improvement can cause a negative impact on both the environment and humans.

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Your ideas need to be clearer and better linked together. Try to use linking words to connect your points.
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Make sure to state clearly whether you agree or disagree in your introduction and conclusion.
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Give more specific examples to support your points. For example, explain how laziness affects society.
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You raised important points about the consequences of scientific innovation.
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