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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that is a positive trend while other do not. What are your opinion in this

#food #countries #feel #trend
It is irrefutable fact that at present
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fast
food
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commonly
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 in the majority of countries and is happening increasingly renowned. Some
people
 think that it is a positive trend
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us
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but other
people
 do not. I personally believe that the drawbacks of
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fast
food
 far outweigh its benefits. My
first
 point is that fast
foods
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has
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 some benefits.
Firstly
this
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this food
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foods
 can recipe easily and
not
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difficulties
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 for preparing. And
this
 thing
also
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 beneficial for cooks because they can
easy
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 make
this
 kind of
food
 and
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 it
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lot of
people
.
Then
 after
this
 phenomenon cooks may have enough financial
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 for
theirself
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themselves
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.
In addition
 that fast
food
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a
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lot of workers.Cause workers do not have enough time for preparing
meal
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 mostly for dinner.
That is
 why
their
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 are always eat fast
food
for
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in order not late for work.
On the other
hand
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 fast
food
 has some
downside
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.Fast
foods
 are
unhealthy
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 thing for us.And we can call it junk
food
foods
 . Because they are to bring a lot of
disease
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.
For example
 obesity
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and heart
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 disease.
Today's
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 most
of
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the
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people
 suffer from obesity actually young
people
. Because they
are
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go to school and they always eat junk
food
their
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in their
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 school kitchen. After
this
 happen they have obesity and
other disease
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another disease
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.
In addition
 that if we always eat fast
food
 it will
wastage
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 of money that you eat out or spend too much money on junk
foods
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 but
also
 you do not know where the ingredients come from and may be spoiled which
cause
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 illness . By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that
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fast
food
 has had a negative impact on our life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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