The number of old people is increasing in many countries. Some people think this causes problems, while others think old people play an important role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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argue that many countries might have problems with an increasing number of elderly
people
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, while others believe that elder
people
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have a major role in
society
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. In my view, even though nations can have numerous issues due to
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transition, I agree that the older generation plays an essential role in communities. The main issue is that the increasing
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population can affect the pension and healthcare system in a negative way. While the government needs to provide more support in the financial and medical sectors.
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, more financial expenditure will be put into the construction of hospitals and old-age care
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,
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, a lower portion of public funds can spend on other fields,
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as education, environment protection, and public transportation.
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, healthy elder
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who could still work in their original position,
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, lead to youngsters gaining fewer opportunities.
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,
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, the old generation often
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as the backbone of
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and family
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a while. To commence with, for
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, old
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means wealthy experience, which could help
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the youngster
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youngster
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to make
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a decision
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decision
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based on their professional advice.
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, in China, the most outstanding medical and advanced technology experts are over 70 years old. Meanwhile, for families, whereas parents are busy
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earning money, grandparents are the ones who always take care of their grandchildren, which
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the pressure of working adults but
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develop
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traditional values to make elders
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the joy of family. In conclusion,
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increasing life expectancy can cause a financial burden to the government, I believe that the elder is an important part of
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and our families because they can guide
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youngster with their experience and look after children.
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