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In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world, in many countries,
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to
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placement
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problem
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 of residents in towns. Some believe that tearing down old
buildings
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 acquiring open space and modernizing. I partly agree with
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 density is increasing related to different reasons in cities in order to
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governments
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tear down unappropriated old
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. Old
buildings
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 have eccentric memories which senior citizens or
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 are
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astonished
 to look through them every time.
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, the
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carrying
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history
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 place. Due to these
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 citizens who lived in old
buildings
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 have some moral and spiritual attachment. Some of them are
unique
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 architectural
masterpiece
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government
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 of citizens.
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, in filmmaking industries old
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goverment
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government
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significancy
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significance
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accomodation
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accommodation
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prioritizing
reconstruction
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 process.
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