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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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It is commonly believed that online education is one of the best educational technics in the latest years.
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, some people disagree with
this
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 statement, they believe that old fashion teaching technics are irreplaceable. In
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 essay, I will illustrate my point of view and support it with examples as well.
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 of all, we can all agree that technology has a major role in our lives especially, in the
last
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 few years, in fact, some people got addicted to it and felt the need to practice it on a daily basis,
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 as using it to communicate with people, entertainment and learning too. A lot of them usually prefer e-learning because it can easily fit their timetable, you can attend their classes while practising something else,
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, some teachers will not allow their students to eat inside the classroom, which is why online learning constitutes comfort for a lot of students.
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, I believe that despite the modern teaching merits, it will never underestimate the significance of old fashion methods. Attending school every day at a specific time will teach the students how to manage their time and takes full responsibility for coming on time,
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, perhaps face-to-face education will not only improves the student's performance on the logical side but
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 the social side, constantly communicating and contacting with teachers and classmates will boost your confidence and develop your social skills as well.
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, some subjects
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 as chemistry and physics require few experimental functions and going through them at home without your teacher's supervision could lead to harm and danger. In conclusion, from my perspective, I think that modern learning strategies are not reliable and it would be better if we focused on face-to-face education for the
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 generation.
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