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Overpopulation of urban areas led to numerous problems . What are the problems faced by urban people due to overpopulation ? Suggest ways by which governments and individuals can tackle this problems ?

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There is no doubt about the fact that the population in developed cities are growing by leaps and bounds. In
this
 essay, I will explain a variety of factors under
this
 problem, but governments and citizens could certainly take actions to address
this
issues
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. There are several consequences due to overpopulation.
Firstly
, living expense is extremely high in
such
 countries caused of the high demand for recourse,
such
 as insufficient food and energy supplies. Government has to rise the price to balance the economic cost in
this
 situation. The
second
 cause appears to be the high unemployment rate, as the number of people increases, the local companies do not open enough job positions to the citizens. The
third
 problem of overpopulation is likely to be housing issues, more homeless increases caused by poor housing supply in the crowded city. Shifting towards the side what can be done to solve these troubled? Governments should allocate resource that ensures only worthy people can receive them.
For example
, increasing food and energy taxes to high-class groups.
Moreover
, individuals should be aware of their consumption of resources to avoid waste.
Second
, by rising the employment rate, the government should provide funding programs to the local small-scale companies for developing their business.
Finally
, people should be sponsored by the government to live in suburban areas to solve the residential and overcrowding issues in downtown areas. In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as the overpopulation of countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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