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You and your family are living in rented accommadation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with rhe condition of some of the furniture.

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Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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Smith, On March 1,
2022
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,2022
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 I bought a
sofa
 on my credit card from your company.
Sofa
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The sofa
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 showroom delivered the
sofa
 to my apartment. A few weeks ago I found that your product has not performed because the
sofa
 is defective. The
sofa
 is unsteady and rocks while I sit on it so it is not comfortable or relaxing and I asked you to change it for a new one. Now I am afraid that I have to ask you to change it again. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 your company would pick up
this
sofa
 for free, and refund the $650 I paid. Enclosed are copies of my records, including my
reciept
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receipt
recent
 delivery invoice, and photos of the broken
sofa
. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. I hope you will resolve the matter to our satisfaction.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Rashidova
Sevinch
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