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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in a English speaking country . You are not satisfied with the condition of the furniture.

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Dear Sir or Madam , On June 17 , 2022 , I selected your accommodation for living in London .At that time,you told me that it had convenient furniture.
However
, a few weeks ago I found that while relaxing your furniture was not satisfactory.
For example
, a sofa in the living room is very uncomfortable for having a rest.When I lay down to sleep on the sofa ,it started creaking.It was a very high sound.
Moreover
, the fridge in the kitchen is very old for use. When I put the meal in it , the fridge did not freeze the food.
Then
 drops of water dripped from it . Please change to a new one that does not creak and does not drop water . Because they are not as good as you said. If you change new ones
instead
 of old furniture , we will have to leave you here. I hope you will resolve the matter to our satisfaction . Yours faithfully, Sardor Utkirov Sardor O'tkirov
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