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Some people say television contributes more than other modern inventions to the quality of life of ordinary people. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that
television
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 plays a more essential role in our life than any other advancements of today’s world. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 point of view.
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 with, our daily activities will be seriously hindered without other modern innovations, whose functions cannot be performed by
television
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.
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, nowadays, an average person is likely to spend a notable amount of time on roads travelling between,
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, his or her workplace and home.
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, the significance of vehicles
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 as cars and motorbikes cannot be denied.
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, a host of different important activities can be undertaken on our smartphones or laptops. These electronic appliances facilitate some of our very basic needs like working, exchanging information and getting access to almost limitless sources of information. They can
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 serve the purposes of entertaining and catching up with the latest current affairs, which are the core functions of
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. Of course, advocates of the aforementioned idea may contend that there are now smart televisions which can perform similar tasks fulfilled by a laptop.
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, from my point of view, these so-called smart TVs are far from able to completely replace laptops or computers in general. Numerous applications
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 as those published by Microsoft, which are considered to be basic yet useful ones on computers, cannot efficiently or even normally function on these enhanced versions of televisions.
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, smart TVs usually come at exorbitant prices which are unaffordable for most of the general population. To conclude, it is pointless, in my opinion, to argue that the contribution of
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 can outweigh that of other inventions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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