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Task 1 Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: what are the changes what are the problems you are facing what part of the service would you like to change Write at least 150 words. You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

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Dear Sir/Madam I would like to express my concern about the recent alterations which your transport service company has implemented in our area (Willington countryside) and the issues which I am contributing
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. As you are already informed there were existed four stations among the Waver Street which were quite proper to handle all the essential and main offices. Food courts and stalls, business buildings, governmental offices, and educational entrances were mainly applicable and surrounded by the mentioned previous four stations, and as a citizen living in Willington, I could achieve all my requirements through one bus, quite fast and normally.
Although
 you added another which I believe you intended as an improvement and made them five, you have changed the locations for the formers, each one quite far from the above-specified fields. Now to meet my routine requirements I am forced to choose the new stoppage and tread the path moderately for 10 minutes by walk, very time-consuming. Before I was able to send my son by your company bus and ask him to get out on Buckingham stop, directly going to school clearly on the opposite side, but now I am obliged to accompany him to take care when walking a couple of minutes to reach the academy.
Also
 reaching to post office created the same issue with delivering my daily parcels as an online shop handler.
Therefore
, I desperately ask that kindly relocate all the previous stops and merely add the fifth one
at the end
 of the street which fortunately a new surrounding is built as a children's playground and can be used quite often by many families. I commend all your efforts and reputations that you plan to innovate as merit but I deeply request to reconsider and pay attention to my cases. I hope the issues can be resolved and look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Abraham Streeter
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Style Variance
To further improve, consider using more varied sentence structures and vocabulary. This can make your letter more engaging to read.
Coherence
In terms of coherence, ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using connectors or transitional phrases can greatly help.
Task Response
For a higher score, directly address each aspect of the task in a separate paragraph to maintain clarity and organization.
Task Response
You've provided a clear explanation of the changes and the problems caused, which effectively addresses the task.
Tone
The formal tone throughout your letter is consistent and appropriate for writing to a service manager.
Conclusion
Your concluding paragraph nicely summarizes your concern and request, ending the letter on a strong note.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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