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Question: Do you agree or disagree that in the near future the role of teachers will be taken by technology?

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Undoubtedly the improvements in
technology
 have changed human life in recent years. What is significant is the fact that
technology
 is considered one of the great replacements for
teachers
. There are some debates which say that tuition should be replaced with
technology
 whereas others oppose
this
 opinion. The following essay tends to discuss both views regarding
this
 debate. It is an undeniable fact that
technology
 can always give its best for teaching while humans may not perform well some days. The human mood has a massive effect on their performance. It is an investigation which says that human mood fluctuates. Or in some ,cases personal incidents may affect their performance. As an example, let’s assume that a teacher loses his father in an accident the
next
 time that he wants to teach, his mood, which is down due to his loss, prevents him to show his full potential of himself.
Thus
, he is not at his best every day which compared to
technology
, is a remarkable weakness.
On the other hand
,
teachers
 with great attitudes attract their students to the subject they are teaching. Nowadays, the topics in school are getting harder and harder per year which makes those topics boring. A teacher with good behaviour can attract most of their students to the topic.
This
 sort of attitude cannot be found in
technology
 since it doesn’t have a soul with it. In conclusion, these types of
teachers
 are a massive advantage over
technology
. To sum up,
Teachers
 may not perform well some days or may not be as productive as
technology
, but they give soul to their class and bring meaning to the class.
That is
 why
teachers
 should not be replaced with
technology
.
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