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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#sports #professionals #money #people #professions
here
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There
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 is a debate going on
whether
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about whether
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 it is fair and justified for
sports
 professionals to earn more money than
people
 in other important
professions
. There are a lot of
professions
 which are overpaid, but in my opinion
sport
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sports
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 professionals are not one of those. Many
people
 focus on the
highest earning
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 professionals and believe that everyone who plays
sports
 professionally receives enormous salaries. Unfortunately,
that is
 not the case and only the best of the best earn huge amounts and are able to live without thinking about money.
Also
, the majority of
people
 do not realize what the athletes had to overcome and how their everyday life looks
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 because in order for them to play at the highest level, their lifestyle must be extremely strict and not the kind that everyone would be jealous of. When comparing the other
professions
 with the
sports
 ones, it is clear and visible that the
people
 who are doctors, teachers,
firefighters
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and firefighters
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 are seriously underpaid. They dedicate their lives
for
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to
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 the
people
 who are suffering and in return, get almost the same salaries as
people
 working in supermarkets, which is unbelievable.
For instance
, in order to become a doctor a person has to earn a degree, which can take up to 10 years of their life just studying in universities. To sum it all up, there are a lot of
professions
 that are extremely underpaid, but those salaries should not come out of
sports
athletes
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athletes'
athlete's
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 pockets, because they are undoubtedly worth every cent they get.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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