In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.Other people are not interested in it saying it's boring Discuss both views and give your opinion

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nations, the majority of individuals are becoming interested in coming to know about the
history
of
their
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accommodation or building
which
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they live in. Other inhabitants are not curious
in
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it telling it is tedious. From my way of thinking, It is very interesting to know the
history
of the place where they live. ● On the one hand, researching
history
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of humans has a number of advantages, the owners can find out who the
first
owner of the
house
was. 
For instance
, if the earlier owner was a well-known actor, the current owner could  advertise it and sell it at a higher cost. 
Furthermore
, the reason a cabin's
history
is extremely significant
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repair or replace things which need to be fixed.  If the residence was originally built extensive years ago with substandard materials, replacement and repair would be necessary. 
For example
, many authorities issue statute of limitation that limits the beneficial life of a building to approximately 50 years.  After that, the building must be fixed or wreaked. ●
On the other hand
, One of the
most
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greatest
way
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of learning about the
history
of a building is to use the Internet.  It gives people many different types of information, all the known events that happened
in
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the reunion can be recorded. 
However
, if the private apartment is situated
the
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outskirts of the town, it is a fine option to request the locals.  They have populated there for a long time, so their knowledge of the
neighborhood
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is magnificent. 
For example
, a person who believed in TV advertising decided to purchase
house
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a house
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in the suburbs. Fortunately, he arrived at the right scene, and the natives told him the story of the whole family being killed in that
house
;  so he could avoid the
house
of bad luck. ●In conclusion, it is very necessary and interesting for all living people to know about their place of residence,
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other humans may not be interested in it.
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