Some people support modern developments in agriculture such as factory farming and creation of new types of fruits and vegetables. However, other people oppose this view. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The growing population is a factor which is responsible for

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more agricultural products. There are several ways to achieve crops,

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traditional or modernized.

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essay will discuss why I,

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many individuals, agree that modern developments in

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are more favourable. Traditional

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is desirable for a group of people who have havoc attitudes about technology.

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, they find it dangerous to make efforts in manufacturing.

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group can not trust the product since they believe the crops are unhealthy. To illustrate, they try to tackle some factory

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and buy all they required from small farms.

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, the modern method is dysfunctional for them and they do not endanger their health on account of using them. While

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traditional

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might be healthier, my

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is that the method is not structive in

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decade. As the requirement

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food has

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, the need

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rapid and

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, governments show partiality to the solutions which have the most outcomes. Indeed,

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modern development speeds up all the

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processes

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of farming.

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, the quality is beneficially increased.

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, all the

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efforts

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will be in the way of developing the modern

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. To conclude, people support different views in order to determine the best way of

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, modern or traditional.

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essay argued that

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there are some benefits in traditional methods, the

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the most welcome and favourable owing to the

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amount

of crops.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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