Obesity is an increaseing public health problem in some part of the world explain some possible reason for this problem, and suggest some solution.

Weight gaining is one of

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that has

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stirred up controversy as it is a starting point of many diseases

such

as cardio disease, diabetes, and more. In

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causes

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of the disease will be discussed and

advices

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will be provided.

Firstly

, eating habit is one of the main causes. Nowadays, many foods and beverages,

such

as desserts, or carbonated drinks, containing high

sugar

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are widely available in the market.

Furthermore

, they are easily accessible on

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the shelf

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shelf

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due to the high expansion of

convenient

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stores in

neighbourhood

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. To address

this

issue, increasing the

sugar

tax by

government

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can be a way. To control the cost, manufacturers either need to lower the

sugar

level per unit or increase its price.

Both

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ways, people will consume fewer sweets.

In addition

, lack of

exercise

is another point to be considered. Because of the hectic urban lifestyle, people tend to have less personal time to do things including a workout. They perceive that a long day of working hours is already exhausting and the

exercise

can be postponed while the work cannot. As so, consuming high calories without burning out some fats is bringing obesity to life eventually. By solving

this

, a workout encouragement policy by a company or government is suggested.

For example

, some companies in Thailand provide free

exercise

classes after operation hours for employees or offer discounts on

gym

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a gym

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membership

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memberships

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. The benefits have received great positive feedback from staff and indirectly reduce the resignation turnover rate. In conclusion, eating

habit

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habits

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and lack of

exercise

are two main problems that cause obesity.

Sugar

tax control and

exercise

encouragement policies should be applied to reduce the issue.