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A 58-year-old
patient
 with controlled diabetes reported to the Department of Periodontics with a chief complaint of painful multiple boils on upper left
teeth
 along with
mobility
 from
past
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 20 days. The
patient
 had recovered from
Covid-19
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 infection two months back, for which he had taken steroids. Past dental history revealed extraction of carious 26 one month back. Clinical examination revealed generalized periodontal abscesses and periodontal pockets in relation to
maxillary
teeth
 , multiple pseudoclefts, grade III
mobility
 wrt
teeth
 # 22 and 25 and grade II
mobility
 of
teeth
 # 21,23 and 24 [Figure 2A].
Also
, grade I
mobility
 was present in
teeth
 # 11,12,13,14, and 15. An unhealed socket was present in relation to tooth # 26 and soft non-tender palatal swelling was present on the left
maxillary
 arch. The
patient
 was already on antibiotics and analgesics prescribed by the previous dentist. Mucormycosis was suspected and
therefore
 a CBCT was advised. The findings were suggestive of the destruction of a
maxillary
 buccal and palatal alveolus in different regions [Figure 2B]. Complete loss of cortical plates was noted in the alveolar bone of
teeth
 # 15 to 26 region resulting in the detached appearance of the cancellous bone from the peripheral margins.
Also
, opacification was seen in the
maxillary
 sinuses bilaterally involving peripheral walls blocking the osteo-meatal complexes. Perforation of the nasal floor was noted on the left aspect of tooth # 24 region. The
patient
 was immediately referred to the
medicine
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 department where
case
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a case
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 of mucormycosis was confirmed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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