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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter Give details about the concert. How you won the tickets. Why you decided to give it to your friend.

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Dear Vishali, How have you been? I got your letter yesterday, I am feeling elated to know that you are getting summer holidays for 2 weeks. Your timing could not better because I won two tickets to the A.R Rehman concert which is holding in
toronto
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next
 month. I am really excited to invite you with me. The concert is taking place at Lakeshore stadium on
3rd
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 of June after
at
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7 PM.
Although
 I could not even think to buy those tickets as they were very expensive.
Last
 night, Mirchi FM had
this
 competition in which we needed to guess some songs through their background instrumentals. I called them and
eventually
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 it went through. I guessed all the songs right and they awarded me with these concert tickets. We are friends
from
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last
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 6 years now and you always have
keen
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 interest in music. I could not think of
better
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a better
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 person to go with other
then
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 you. Waiting for your
next
 letter. Regards Disha
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