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The resroration of old buidings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. this money would be better spent on new housing and road development .to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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The
renovation
 of old buildings in main towns over the world is costly .
these expenditure
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this expenditure
these expenditures
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 would be better to
investe
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invest
on
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in
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 new housing and infrastructure
such
 as road development. I totally agree with
this
 point of view
becouse
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because
effectiveness
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the effectiveness
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 of
renovation
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renovating
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old
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an old
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 building is
consideralby
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considerably
 low. if
these money
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this money
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 invest
on
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in
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 amenities , it helps to improve
people
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people's
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 life stand and
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economy
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the econmy
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econmy
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economy
 of the country Nowadays,the restoration of old buildings in major cities has become a trend
instead
 of demolishing
it
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them
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. the main reason
of
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for
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this
phenomena
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phenomenon
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,
govenments
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governments
beieve
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believe
 that old
building
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buildings
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 can enhance the
cities's
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cities'
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 look
like
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apply
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and
attrack
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attract
 tourists.
However
, rebuilding
of
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apply
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ancient
builddings
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buildings
 requires special technologies and materials and
also
 it is time
consuamble
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consumable
 process.
Althouth
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Although
 these
building
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buildings
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 are
resorated
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resorted
resonated
, the
maintaining
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maintenance
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cost
of
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apply
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is
also
 higher than modern
one
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ones
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becouse
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because
,many old buildings need more
enegy
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energy
as old
achiolgical
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archaeological
 designs are not
compled
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completed
complied
 with new technological
devises
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devices
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 .and
alson
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also
 these
building
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buildings
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 need special
treatement
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treatment
continusly
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continuously
to protect
from
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them from
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harsh
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the harsh
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 weather
condition
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conditions
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.
thefore
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therefore
,
On the other hand
, many
people
 in the world are suffering from
lack
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a lack
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 of housing and other
amenties
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amenities
. if the government can spend money to improve housing and
infrastucure
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infrastructure
infrastructures
,
people
's living
standard
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standards
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can be improved .
Moreover
 ,
deveoping
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developing
 roads and other
infrasturecure
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infrastructure
 have a great influence on the
ecomny
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economy
company
develoment
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development
.
For
example
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,example
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builing
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building
 a new road to
countryside
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the countryside
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, Industries ,which are located in
the
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apply
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remote
are
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area
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, can get profit
form
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from
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 product exporting
thus
 these advantages
not
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are not
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 only for the company but
aslo
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also
 whole
the
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of the
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 country. In conclusion, despite
renovation
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the renovation
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 of old
buildnigs
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buildings
is
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being
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 costly, the effectiveness of
renovation
 can be low.
However
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 if the money
spend
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spent
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 on roads and housing
project
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projects
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, it helps to enhance
people
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people's
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 life
standard
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standards
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 and
economy
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the economy
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 of the country
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