Parents believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that their time should be used to do more school work. How do you think that children should spend their free time?

In today's society, Children are speeding about 6 to 7 hours at
school
. In fact at home some
time
is allocated to homework,
therefore
the rest of the day or on weekend growing up as a child
also
means learning stuff outside
school
. We can find some obvious benefits
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free
time
but a majority of parents ask for more
school
time
.
First
of all, research
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made about children's brains and the better conditions to learn. It is proved that everybody is more efficient in the morning and
also
that the "after-lunch" periods are the worse. After learning from
school
and doing the homework, children should use free
time
to relax or to practice leisure activities
for example
because working our body is as important as working our brain.
Moreover
, at
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nighttime, our brain
recover
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and assimilates all the information of the day.
In addition
, the advantages of free
time
are numerous as well as becoming sociable with others
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the capacity to speak in front of some people. The qualities I just mentioned are useful to build confidence
also
we allow boys and girls to find something they are passionate about. Creativity is
also
a consequence of
this
period of
time
.
For instance
, I spent mine dancing in a club and I can be grateful now that a have a strong memory useful for my job. To sum up, I truly believe that free
time
is crucial and we can agree that the brain is a muscle which needs to train,
nevertheless
he needs to rest too.
Therefore
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of a great repartition between Schoolwork and free
time
are essential for every child to build the person he or she will become.
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