Parents believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that their time should be used to do more school work. How do you think that children should spend their free time?

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In today's society, Children are speeding about 6 to 7 hours at

school

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. In fact at home some

time

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is allocated to homework,

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the rest of the day or on weekend growing up as a child

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means learning stuff outside

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. We can find some obvious benefits

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free

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but a majority of parents ask for more

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time

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of all, research

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made about children's brains and the better conditions to learn. It is proved that everybody is more efficient in the morning and

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that the "after-lunch" periods are the worse. After learning from

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and doing the homework, children should use free

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to relax or to practice leisure activities

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because working our body is as important as working our brain.

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, at

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nighttime, our brain

recover

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and assimilates all the information of the day.

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, the advantages of free

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are numerous as well as becoming sociable with others

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and

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the capacity to speak in front of some people. The qualities I just mentioned are useful to build confidence

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we allow boys and girls to find something they are passionate about. Creativity is

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a consequence of

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period of

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, I spent mine dancing in a club and I can be grateful now that a have a strong memory useful for my job. To sum up, I truly believe that free

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is crucial and we can agree that the brain is a muscle which needs to train,

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he needs to rest too.

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the

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of a great repartition between Schoolwork and free

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are essential for every child to build the person he or she will become.

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Parents believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that their time should be used to do more school work. How do you think that children should spend their free time?

Your opinion

In most countries, the crime rate is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate?

Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Now adays the population of young people is more than old people in the countries. And it benefit us To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday.