nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone traking and security cameras). in many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this happening do you think the advatages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

these days more
people
are being watched by
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smart devices
such
as mobiles and surveillance
cameras
.
in
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alot
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a lot
of
occasions
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they do not know that they are being followed. While
this
offers a few benefits, there are
also
some disadvantages which are worth considering.
firstly
, security
cameras
made a revolution in terms of security. in the
past
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it was difficult to figure out what happen
in
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a crime
secne
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scene
when a crime happened. so, by introducing
such
technology
people
now feel
more safe
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.
however
, even if
people
are unaware of being under surveillance, these
cameras
made the community a better place.
secondly
, is that parents can use these
cameras
inside
thier
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their
houses to monitor their babies while they are busy
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managing other house chores. other
people
think that
such
technology may carry risks to them.
moreover
, cellphone
traking
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tracking
is on the rise.
people
being followed or tracked through their cellphones unknowingly.
for instance
, some hackers are
profissional
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professional
in finding their way into the cellphones
cameras
or house
cameras
and can reach
to
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sensitive information.
furthuremore
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furthermore
, there are
alot
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a lot
of mobile
application
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can
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that can
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follow the
person
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steps and know where you are and even what are you doing.
for example
, google software,
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say someone went a
resturant
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restaurant
to try a new dish,
after
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leaving the place that person will get a notification asking how was the food, and how much do you rate it.
as a result
,
alot
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a lot
feel they are unsafe with
such
feature and consider it a disadvantage. in conclusion,
people
can install security
cameras
to protect their selves and their belonging as well
to
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monitor what is happening while they are busy. other feel
this
is
risk
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a risk
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to their privacy.
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