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In some countries, university students live away from home and in another city while studying. Do you think the disadvantsges outweigh the advantages of living in another city?

#countries #university #students #home #city #disadvantsges
In
few
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a few
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 nations, institutions
learner
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learners
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 live far from
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their house
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house
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houses
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 in another urban area during studying. The impact of living in different urban
City
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Cities
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 was always debatable and has now become more controversial. Many people claim that shifting in various
area
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areas
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, has
a massive advantages
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a massive advantage
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. But, others reject
this
 notion. In my, opinion the position
of
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this
 issue appears to be more rational. In
this
, essay we will
further
 elaborate
the
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 positive and negative effects of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of
reason
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reasons
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 which will
further
 explain
this
 argument. yet, the most preponderant fact is that it is
adequate
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an adequate
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 opportunity for youngsters to
consumed
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consume
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 new information and knowledge. While, introducing
with
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new commodities
such
cuisine
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as cuisine
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, religion,
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and attires
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attires
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attire
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. Another striking benefit in
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this
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the
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this
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 regard
this
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apply
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is that pupils have
ability
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the ability
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 to
enchanced
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enhance
enhanced
the
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their
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desion
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decision
 making
skill
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skills
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. In, addition as
a
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an
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 example, I
am learned
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have learned
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 some new dish recipes in
newzealand
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Newzealand
NewZealand
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 while studying
such
 as pizza, and,
sandwich
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sandwiches
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 to say, all these merits stand in good stead.
However
, there are some pitfalls that negate
theses
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these
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 arguments which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
this
 affair.
Although
, the bullet point is that it is not appropriate in
this
 modern era, because we have countless resources to
achieved
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achieve
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 academic
degree
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degrees
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 with the help of
internet
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the internet
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, and, technology.
Besides
, it is expensive to live in
other region
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another region
other regions
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 due to the fact individuals needs
esstinal
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essential
 items
such
apartment
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as apartment
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, food,
garments
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and garments
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 which are costly perhaps in various places.
Moreover
, the survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford revealed that
population
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the population
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 spend
huge
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a huge
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 amount of wealth on international education.
Hence
, it is clearly stated why many are against
of
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this
 dilemma. In conclusion, according to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach
to
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a
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 conclusion that
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
 situation are instrumental indeed.
Nevertheless
,
it's
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its
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 potential drawbacks should be not overlooked either.
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