In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

There
has
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been significant developments. In technology related to agriculture over the past few years.
However
, poverty and the lack of
food
sources is still a
world-wide
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proldem
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problem
. There are several
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why
this
happens. The
first
reason
why many
people
around the world
is
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still starving is because of the unbalanced distribution of
food
products
. Many restaurants in advanced
countries
produce lots of
food
waste every year. In
fact
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many
products
are being thrown away in these
countries
because it is not consumed and
out
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of date. An effective way of dealing with
this
problem can be equally distributing
food
products
and crops among the
countries
.
This
can
also
be done by shipping
left over
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, or excess
food
products
and donating them to poorer
countries
. Another
reason
why advances in agriculture
is
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not solving the
world-wide
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problem might be because the advances are made in unrelated fields.
For example
, scientists are more interested in
GMO
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GMOs
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and making fruits tastier than in growing crops in areas that have harsh
climate
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.
This
can be the
reason
why
people
living in dry
climate
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or cold places fail to obtain
food
even though
the
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technology is advancing. A solution for
this
can be paying more attention to different fields of research. scientists and companies should focus more on providing
technological
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support to starving
people
than
to
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fabricating
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various types of fruits and
vegitables
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vegetables
.
Although
there are many improvements made in agriculture, many
people
around the globe still lack
of
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food
source
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.
This
is mainly because of problems in
food
distribution and indifference
in
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these problems.
This
problem can be solved by donating
un consumed
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food
products
,
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and doing more research on growing crops in harsh conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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