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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Languages
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 play a vital role in globalization. Some
people
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 think that we should discover
a new
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new languages
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languages
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 for increased connection between
internationaly
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internationally
international
. There are manifold advantages of
invantion
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invention
 a new
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languages
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language
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 which
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 drawbacks.
Therefore
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, I will give
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an explanation
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 in the ensuing paragraphs.
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 with, there are
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plethora
 benefits of
invantion
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invention
a new
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new languages
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languages
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.
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, if
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 communicate in
same
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 language over the world, they would
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 their business globally.
As a result
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, increased
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countries'
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 income.
Secondly
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 folk should invent a language at
international
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the international
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 level. They can easily learn
different
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about different
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culture
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cultures
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.
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, these days
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is become
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universal
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a universal
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languagein
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language in
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countries
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.
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,
people
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 can learn numerous things by
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english
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.
Thirdly
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,
a
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new
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language
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also
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helps
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 in
tourism
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 sector.
People
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 do not any help from
guiad
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guild
guide
, they easily understood
about
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history
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the history
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 and
particular
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a particular
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place
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places
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 without
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the helps
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helps
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 of
local
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locals
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.
However
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, there are
also
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 several
drawbacksto
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drawbacks to
drawbacks
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a
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new
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.
The young
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people
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has
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 good grasping power. They can easily learn new things. On
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, aged
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who
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face many
difficulty
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difficulties
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 to learn
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In addition
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, it
is
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also
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effect
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on
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those business
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that business
those businesses
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 which work
on
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locally.
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 as tourist
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guides
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, if
people
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 know the
languages
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 which communicate over the world. So, folks do not need any guidance to learn about history, culture and so on. English
is become
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becomes
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 universal but some countries like
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France
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,
they
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do not adopt
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this
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this language
these languages
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languages
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 because they think that when they adopt it, it would be disappeared
their
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 culture and history. In conclusion,
although
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 the invation of
a
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new
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give
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 numerous benefits
of
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apply
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around the world
especially
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 in business globalization
which
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it
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 leads
advantages
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to advantages
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 more than disadvantages of new
languages
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international communication
  • cultural richness
  • linguistic heritage
  • cognitive benefits
  • global collaboration
  • efficiency
  • educational resources
  • cultural homogenization
  • multilingualism
  • resistance to change
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