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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

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There are controversial perspectives heating up a debate over the reason why a wealth of
museum
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museums
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 and historical
places
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 draw attention to predominant
travelers
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 rather than locals.
This
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 grave problem. Without a shadow of a doubt,
museums
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 are more visited by tourists for a number of reasons.
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 foreign tourists often are more curious about
museums
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 and historical sites that may widely broaden their horizon of the identities and culture of other nations, local people have a firm grasp of their own native land and have a tendency to spend time and money to explore other faraway
places
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.
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, Nha Trang is a well-known tourist destination
of
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 VietNam, which is visited by the majority of
travelers
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.
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, There are more visitors who have
interest
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an interest
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 in visiting
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 and historical areas than local residents. There are a bunch of methods to encourage the appearance of local inhabitants. The government should invest in services and improve financial conditions in
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apply
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appealing
places
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 to create more jobs for citizens in those
places
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.
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, Sapa is provided financial support by the governor to help people
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do business in that place and
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 it can arouse more interest from locals.
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, there are a number of ways to motivate locals to visit their own
museums
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 and historical
places
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.
To sum up
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although
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 many faraway tourists are more attracted to visiting
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 and historical sites than local ones, there are still a great many ways that can address
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 problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Take for granted
  • Economical constraints
  • Routine obligations
  • Programming
  • Cater
  • Engagement
  • Community involvement
  • Personal connection
  • Cultural relevance
  • Discounts
  • Sense of ownership
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Local traditions
  • Field trips
  • Cultural bond
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