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The key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

#generation #life #benefit #future #generations
It is
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 truth that environmental issues
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 become a controversial talk of
contemporary
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 era. Forasmuch as we are endamanin to
environment
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 by companies,
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industries
industry
..., some believe the key solution for
this
 problem is for the current generation to live with less comfortable life to benefit future people. The main
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 of impending composition is to elaborate my certitude with befitting examples. Beginning with my rationalisation , there
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 multifarious
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 to stand with disagreement , The prominent one is government. What it
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 is they must control their
consumptions
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through
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 ordering all
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departmental or even forcing .
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 , to exemplify some civilized countries governments can encourage or support scientists in order to make machines ,
new
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 technologies for
economicing
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economic
economical
 and
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. Exploring ahead the topic , one more worth noticing crux is cultural works . To explicate it governments can increase
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cultural
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 loving
environment
 in society .
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 create tv
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programs
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,
education
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and education
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 in schools , as well as organize local groups . As the result,
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 the country will be rich
culture
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by
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 at the least difficulties for
environment
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the environment
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 . In
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 based on
above
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 discussion ، it is lucid that
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 comfortable life isn't efficient , both government and
people
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the people
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 must collaborate .
Generally
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 control their consumption by scientific methods and
in addition
 loving
environment
 .
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