Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.
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not always the case. In my opinion, that would have been true a few decades ago, but with the advance
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and the increasing amount of job positions that do not require higher education, the statement seems to be outdated.
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For example
, in the medical field, is important to pursue a major degree
so that the individual becomes a good professional and knows how to take care of their patients. But regarding
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, entrepreneurs like Bill Gates who funded
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Besides
Bill Gates, we can look at Walt Disney, who did not go to college, but learned throughout his job as a cartoonist, how to produce movies, and slowly but surelly
, with smart moves like collaborating with armed forces in world war II, created one of the biggest companies: The Walt Disney Company.
To conclude, in some cases it is important to have a Correct your spelling
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therapist, but in others what it takes is willpower and learning through practice. It is inspiring to know that accomplishment and realization can come from inside, and not only depend on external causes.Correct your spelling
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite