Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your won opinion.
People have different views about who plays a more important role for
children
to be a proper participant
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participants
for
society. While some people agree that Change preposition
in
school
has responsible
for it, I believe that its accomplishment needs both Replace the word
responsibility
parents
and teachers.
It is no doubt that children
is
influenced by Change the verb form
are
Correct pronoun usage
their parents’s
parents’s
personality traits particularly their Remove the s
parents’
conducts
because Fix the agreement mistake
conduct
parents
are children
‘s teachers before being educated. Until they go to school
, there are hardly social
activities even little older friends. The majority of Correct quantifier usage
any social
students
spend plenty of time on their grades rather than interpersonal
skills Change preposition
on interpersonal
such
as communicate
, Wrong verb form
communicating
listen
and Wrong verb form
listening
handle
conflicts. Wrong verb form
handling
Conversely
, parents
are easy to utilize their daily events and take these as examples teaching their children
.
On the other hand
, I can understand the arguments Correct pronoun usage
that support
support
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supporting
liability
of Correct article usage
the liability
school
for teaching. The reason for Fix the agreement mistake
schools
this
view is that school
is a micro society
for Add a hyphen
micro-society
children
and teachers should manage and guide them to become better not just study hard. For example
, when a fight have
happened among Correct subject-verb agreement
has
students
, it is reasonable to solve by
their teacher who can teach those Correct pronoun usage
it by
students
to judge whether or not their conduct is correct and forgiven after apology instead
of their own parents
. Obviously, the teacher is no respecter of his or her students
and protecting their own child is the instinct of parents
.
To conclude, there are good reasons why school
should improve the children
to be excellent members for
society, but in my Change preposition
of
opinion
it will do more with less if there is Add a comma
,opinion
guidance
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the guidance
a guidance
of
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from
parents
for them on
free time.Change preposition
in
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite