Why do students prefer doing part time jobs during their studies? Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

It has been known that a number of
students
choose to
work
when they study. I believe that
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sides of
this
behaviour
outweight
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outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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because of different reasons.
To begin
with, due to the fact that starting the working life constitutes the main purpose of many people
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have studied various fields, they ought to prepare
to
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for
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real business conditions as soon as possible. To illustrate, a young person who has
educated
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in
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at
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the
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university
,
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waits for making
money
which accounts for
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aim of adolescents in
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quiet
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countries. In fact, the
students
can
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to
early
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opportunity to meet
difficulties
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the difficulties
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of earning
money
to live by working. It
also
enable
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to
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them to
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benefit
to
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their parents who suffer from poverty, in terms of
money
issues.
Therefore
, working
part
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part-time
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time
when during
study
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the study
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,
has
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vary of advantages for young citizens.
On the other hand
,
part
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part-time
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time
jobs might have some downsides
for
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in
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many aspects
such
as
physical
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the physical
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difficulties of jobs, ages of employees as well as schedules of schools.
For example
, if a college student
who
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has to
work
to afford his education or different needs, goes heavy
work
, he can not keep up with his friends due to
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becoming exhausted.
Moreover
, no one can deny that
part
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part-time
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time
job is suitable for
seconday
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secondary
education
students
not younger ages than it.
Finally
, if class programs are carried out
similtanously
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simultaneously
job
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with job
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hours, the student might choose
job
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a job
the job
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in case of poverty.
Nevertheless
, all of these thoughts should be concerned by
government
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the government
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and if we consider regular
curcimstances
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circumstances
, it can be evaluated that working
part
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part-time
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time
for
students
has positive
impacts
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impact
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on their
lifes
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lives
life
life's
. To conclude, going to
work
during the study has various advantages for young people
for
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many aspects like meeting real business
area
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areas
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early and helping their families by
makig
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making
money
in appropriate situations.
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